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Response to Invictus, Vincens ut Vinceret
February 1, 2009, 00:58
Filed under: Christ

 

Invictus by William Ernest Henley

Out of the night that covers me,
Black as the pit from pole to pole,
I thank whatever gods may be
For my unconquerable soul

In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced nor cried aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of chance,
My head is bloody, but unbowed.

Beyond this place of wrath and tears
Looms but the Horror of the shade,
And yet the menace of the years
Finds and shall find me unafraid

It matters not how strait the gate,
How charged with punishments the scroll,
I am the master of my fate,
I am the captain of my soul

Trumpethope19,  posted this poem, when I was a young guy this was my anthem!  He really brought back memories , but things have changed in my outlook on life, so I now post my version.  

           vincens ut vinceret  , by Will Hapeman,  [Sorry Mr. W.E. Henley]

Out of the night that covered me 

 Black as the pit from pole to pole,                                                                            

      I thank my God for loving me,  

        and purchasing my soul.

In a long predicted circumstance  

He bled but never cried out loud                                                                               

  Paying my price with Cross and Lance                                                                    

  His head was bloody , thorn-crowned,  bowed.                                                     

From this place of wrath and tears  

         He killed the Horror of the shade    

         So the menace of the years        

        finds and shall find me unafraid

Narrow it is , and straight the gate          

    but no punishments are on my scroll  

    Jesus is Master of my fate,                

    Christ is Captain of my soul.

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Love it!

Comment by Shawn W

Meh, I like the poem in of itself. But I dont exactly respect the fact that you’re altering another man’s work to fit your theology.

To each his own…

Comment by trumpethope19

TH19 It is like Saturday night live doing a spoof on something, and I did give the guy credit, and even apologized to him! You are rough! And besides all that you started it! I couldn’t find the thing.
anyway your question was why i no longer believe in or use the poem as my motto, now you know!
Shalom

Comment by willohroots

haha. I know. I’m just giving you crap. Don’t be offended!!

Anyways…here I am writing something as you requested via email.

Comment by trumpethope19

[…] I’ve come across some responses to the poem (I admit, I google my own blogs!), including vincens ut vinceret by Will Hapeman. I quite like it. It took largely the same tack as mine, swapping words and phrases, and ended up […]

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